Hi hi,
So here are some songs I wrote a little bit ago, I thought I'd post them on here to get some feedback, let me know, thanks :)

1. And mess with pretty girls to prove that you're alive

Silly boy
Who Do you think you are?
Playing Games and acting so cool
hurting everyone close to you
Yeah you've become the world's greatest player
The kind of guy you used to hate
And even though you try so hard to hide it I can still see right through yo

Yeah I know you cry yourself to sleep at night
Leave the light on to keep the monsters out
And mess with pretty girls to prove that your alive

And there you go again covering it all up with that fake smile
Laughing like you're not really hurting
Drowning your sorrows with the scent of her perfume
Moving so fast you can't possibly stop to think
Yeah it keeps you happy for now
But we both know it won't last

We know that you cry yourself to sleep at night
Leave the light on to keep the monsters out
And mess with pretty girls to prove that your alive

And you hide and you lie
And act like you've got it all together
But I know the magic words
That will shatter that mask of yours
That will drop you to your knees and make you tremble
Make you cry
Cause I know you inside out

See I know you cry yourself to sleep at night
Leave the light on to keep the monsters out
And mess with pretty girls to prove that you're alive

and its killing me to watch
But there's nothing I can do
Cause it wont mean a thing if i tell you who you are
You've got to find out for yourself
And even if it takes a while I'll still be here waiting
Cause we're best of friends
And I dont know where I'd be without you
So please, hurry up and find the truth



2. I don't know the first thing about saving Lives

It's the middle of summer
And you're Wearing Long sleeves Again
Yeah we know what that means
I sneak glance as you shove the sleeve back down
I see the fresh made scars
And my heart breaks
Yeah I know life's been tough
But that don't mean you have to give up.

And girl I don't know a thing about saving lives
But I know I've got to try
Yeah for you I'll play the hero
And Save your life tonight

And Girl I know you're hurting, and so am I
But I just don't know what else to do
Its killing me inside, every time I see that smile
So fake and so strained
But then I guess, I can't hate you for that
Cause I do it all the time
The truth is, I'm just too scared to face you

And girl I don't know a thing about saving lives
But I know I've got to try
Yeah for you I'll play the hero
And Save your life tonight

And I don't know how It ever got this bad.
Or why it took so long for me to notice
Cause this is the kind of thing for television shows
Like degrassi and Secret Life
But girl this isn't the tv anymore
Its reality
And its got me shaking like a leaf

And I just don't know how to help
Cause I don't know a thing about saving lives
But I know I've got to try
And save your life tonight

No I don't want to ever have to get that call.
In the middle of the night that says you went too far
And I don't want have to see the blood stains on the floor
Or the marks all over your arms
I can't take anymore
I can't just sit here and watch you through it all away

And maybe I don't know
The first thing about saving lives
But I know I've got to try
And for you'll play the hero
And save your life tonight....
No I wont let you go...
No, I'll save your life tonight



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~True Heroism is remarkably sober, very undramatic. It is not the urge to surpass all others, whatever the cost. But rather the urge to serve others whatever the cost~
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3. Surrender Brings Healing

All this bitterness and rage
You've got to stop it
Can't you see
Its tearing you apart
And I don't know who you are anymore
Now Its time to forgive and forget

So lift your hands up
Drop to your knees
Let your heart out
And give it all up to Him

Yeah I know he hurt you
He told you loved you
Then turned around and betrayed you
And lied over and over again
But girl you've got to know
That what you're doing is just as bad
You've got to move on
Quit holding it in

Just
Lift your hands up
Drop to your knees
Let your heart out
And give it all up to Him

You heart is bleeding
And your eyes are red from crying
You feel like these scars
Will never ever heal
And you're right
They won't
Not without the help of a savior
But you just want to keep on fighting
Even through surrender is the only thing that brings healing
So I'm telling you one last time

lift your hands up
Drop to your knees
Let your heart out
And give it all up to him

4. A heart is a fragile thing

A heart is a fragile thing
I learned that from you
I never knew a heart could break so easily
I never knew how much damage one man could do.
So thanks for teaching me the one lesson I'll never forget.
A heart is a fragile thing

You were charming and happy.
And from the very beginning I knew you were a flirt
But I didn't care
Stupid me...
I played your game
let you walk all over me
I gave you my heart and my soul
Let you captivate my every thought
And watched you destroy me bit by bit
Rip apart my precious friendship
And make me cry

And I never knew a heart could break so easily
I never knew how much damage one man could do.
So thanks for teaching me the one lesson I'll never forget.
A heart is a fragile thing

I died each time I saw another in your arms
And couldn't breathe when I saw you dance with her
You became my everything
Even invading my dreams
I couldn't sleep, or eat, or do anything without thinking of you
You were everywhere and everyone

And I never knew a heart could break so easily
I never knew how much damage one man could do.
So thanks for teaching me the one lesson I'll never forget.
A heart is a fragile thing

And just like a fool I fell for you
I let you jerk me around and around and around
Listening to your sad little story
And thinking it wasn't your fault
But not anymore
This heart just can't take it anymore
You've crossed that line just one too many times
You've finally hurt me enough
To make me see the truth
its not your past that's doing this its you
And if that's the case you're not worth my time
Cause my heart is just to fragile to deal with it

And I want to hate you
To regret you
To forget about you
But I simply can't
Because you taught me an important lesson
A heart is a fragile thing

TRELL!!!!!!!! are you back for a good bit?

Very... Emotional songs. I liked them they were really nice.
(yeah I know not very informative)

ha ha thanks! Yeah I guess I'm kinda back, idk, I just pop in whenever I think about it, i don't always post though

Well you should 'think' about here a lot more then

The songs are so sad! I like them, even though I'm not really much of a love song fan myself. *shrug*

But what I really wanted to say is that 5 or 6 years ago I was in a very difficult time in my life. It was stressful, busy and I was really little more than a kid yet taking on the responsibility of many adults. No exaggeration. During this time I did my first "work all night without sleep" deal, had my first emotional breakdown where I was hysterical and had no control over the tears that streamed down my face and stifled screams to the best of my ability, and also learned a great deal.

But during this time, I discovered BotB series, and by looking for it's website found this forum. This forum was one of the precious few things that brought me joy in that time, outside of what I could glean out of the everyday circumstances. And in this forum, YOU were one of the group that I kept my eyes peeled for and enjoyed their posts the most! Quite frankly, you and that group (whose names I sadly cannot remember) were very inspiring to me! Not to mention all the joy y'all brought into my life!

Thank you Trellis!! Thank you so very much!

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"Courage is not the absence of fear, but rather the judgment that something else is more important than fear." ~Ambrose Redmoon


"Courage is resistance to fear, mastery of fear - not absence of fear. Except a creature be part coward it is not a compliment to say it is brave." ~Mark Twain,

wow, I'm really touched, I had no idea I and the others had that much of an influence on people. Truth is, I was in a very similar place, life just plain sucked and I was going through a lot of different crap between my family, friends, and other stuff, this place was also my happy place, the place that made everything better. I'm really glad to hear that we were able to affect your life for the better :)

These are really cool, Trel. You ought to post this kind of thing more often--do you have music written for them too?

ha ha no, my musical talent = 0. I know absoluely nothing about it, I don't know any notes, I couldn't tell you the different between a C of a E. Anywho I've got kind a melody down in my head, at least for some of them, so I can kind of sing them, but I suck at singing so that doesn't really help

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~True Heroism is remarkably sober, very undramatic. It is not the urge to surpass all others, whatever the cost. But rather the urge to serve others whatever the cost~
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Augh, I wish I'd realized you'd posted these here. XD I'm still having fb issues, so, GOOD CALL there.

I can't claim any sort of knowledge on songs or poetry (I don't really crit either because I don't feel I have the authority to), but these are cool! "It's the middle of summer/and you're wearing long sleeves again" is a particularly powerful line; I honestly think that could stand on its own, because you know instantly what it's implying and it's like a kick in the gut, right there at the beginning. A good kick.

Definitely, deeeeeefinitely share more of these when you have 'em. And if you DO write music for them, share that too! :D