Hey all, wondering if I could get some thoughts, comments on another song i've written?

Anyway the basic idea behind it is "trails (for lack of a better word) make us stronger"

let me know if it makes any sense, and what you think :D

thanks






Why can t the stories start out right?
Why must there always be a fight?
Still, if we really love at all, couldn’t we weather this storm?

They say the hard times will tear us apart.
But if a heart’s been broken will it tear anymore?
If we only last until it starts to rain, was it worth it from the start?

And it’s the struggle that leaves us stronger—in the end.
If we never learned from the scars, then did we really heal at all?

I watched her fighting to pull it off.
A chance to make, or break it all.
I say I’ve been there before.

If we never learned from the scars, then did we really heal at all?


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“A good novel tells us the truth about its hero; but a bad novel tells us the truth about its author.” ~G.K. Chesterton

I like it! My only complaint is it seems you use a lot of the same words over and over.

P.S. Like your signature quote.





I'd like to make myself believe
That planet Earth turns slowly
It's hard to say that I'd rather stay
Awake when I'm asleep
'Cause everything is never as it seems.


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Edited 1 times. Last edit at 07/31/10 03:06PM by Faerie Watcher.

Same here. But it's good.

I liked it. A liitle depressing...

You probably think finding nemo is depressing though so ....

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